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Saturday, March 17, 2018

Open Prompt 2 #2 (I think...?)



1979


Choose a complex and important character in a novel or a play of recognized literary merit who might on the basis of the character’s actions alone be considered evil or immoral. In a well-organized essay, explain both how and why the full presentation of the character in the work makes us react more sympathetically than we otherwise might. Avoid plot summary.




As it is often said, our actions do not always define who we are as a person, but at what point do those action reflects who we are? In The Kite Runner, The main character Amir is put into several circumstances where he is in between a rock and a hard place, causing his actions to reflect that internal struggle. The Kite Runner by Khaled Hosseini, uses themes of betrayal and forgiveness to show that no matter how bad an action is, it does not have to define you as a person.


In the first half of The Kite Runner, Amir is faced with the the judgement of the other boys over his best friend, Hassan, being a Hazara in a community of Pashtuns. The boys, although different in race, were inseparable until Amir started listening to the hurtful words of the other boys. The apex of the betrayal was when Amir pretended not to see the rape of Hassan, even though he could of helped the situation. Such a serious moment is nearly impossible to process as a child, hence the hesitation and fear that Amir felt in the moment. Without any other context, it would seem that Amir left his friend to suffer without any second though; whereas in reality, he was nothing more than a confused child that was scared to tell anyone or do anything. The innocence of the situation cuts the malevolence tenfold, hence not making this one act of betrayal reflective of Amir’s personality as a whole. Furthermore, Amir let the burden of watching his childhood friend’s rape weigh on him throughout his adult life. The guilt that Amir bore also reflects on his personality showing how even though he made a horrible mistake he held himself credible for it.


On the flipside of the situation, Hassan used the power of forgiveness to rise above the evil that Amir committed. Beyond ignoring Hassan’s rape, Amir also falsely accused Hassan of stealing and furthermore got him and his father kicked out/ moved out of Baba’s home that they shared. The action on Amir’s behalf was done out of anger and frustration that he could not find his father’s love. Although not an excuse, Hassan understood and followed Amir’s will, like he always would and left the safehaven that was Baba’s home. From the point of moving out on, Hassan never held it against Amir because he understood and choose to forgive Amir for feeling the way he did. Although the evil was committed and the pain was felt, Hassan chose to forgive Amir and chose to see him still as the wonderful friend he had been. That forgiveness allowed Hassan to not let Amir’s actions define him and chose to see past the pain and hurt to remember who Amir once was to him.


Amir is that of a tragic hero, it took him falling apart and doing so much wrong to see that he could do good in the world. Although it took time and consideration, Amir learned to not let his acts of betrayal towards Hassan define him. With the cure of forgiveness, Amir was able to free himself from the actions that once defined his childhood.

Wednesday, March 7, 2018

Open Prompt 1 #2 2004

  1. I would score student #1 an 8 on the AP grading scale. The intro showed great control and understanding of what she wanted to talk about regarding the prompt. The Intro could have acted as an independent answer to the prompt due to their T.A.P. organization of the intro. Secondarily, The student did a good job avoiding plot summary and balancing it with enough information to explain their examples for their answer. Student #1’s handwriting was good enough that I did not struggle when reading it, but it without a shadow of doubt could have been improved for the sake of the AP readers. My other small gripe about Student #1’s essay was the length of it- a good essay should be concise and get to the point. They did make good use of their words, but I also feel that the essay could have been condensed further.

  1. Student #2 would have scored a 5 if I were to of graded these essays. The intro to the essay was rather weak and although could have technically stood on its own, was still bare in nature and stripped down to the bare minimum of what needed for an AP intro. I do like the fact there are scribbles all over the page because that means that the student thought about how best to word their work and worked through their problem nevertheless. The handwriting, on a shallow level, was very easy to read- which I really appreciated. On a literary level, I feel that the student kept the essay at a very shallow level and did not talk into any depth about the meanings of the examples that she provided.
  1. Student 3’s essay probably would have earned a 2 or 3 if I were to of graded the essays. The first thing that I noticed when I went to read the essay, was that there seemed to be no paragraph breaks which was beyond frustrating to read. Another silly mistake that they made was not underlining the name of the story, which is technically incorrect. As far as intros go, I am not really sure where the intro stops and where the first paragraph starts- and that makes it rather hard to judge the quality of the intro when you can not even find it. Along the lines of not being able to find an intro, I was also not able to find the conclusion! The essay simply just rambles off into a finishing point. The only compliment that I can think of is that the student has pretty nice handwriting, which makes the essay a smidgen better.